J.C. Belding

I really enjoyed your rhyming scheme, especially in your 4th and 5th stanzas. To me they captured the most meaning of the entire piece. I really don't have any suggestions ...

This is a great piece! I loved how you maintained a sense of mystery from start to finish. Only one minor suggestion. You should put "wonderful" on a separate line. ...

I liked that your poem was short, yet conveyed a very deep sense of emotion. There's just a couple suggestions I would make. You could say "a fever" instead of ...

I loved the passion you put into this poem, especially towards the end. It might just be me, but the rhyme scheme in your opening lines didn't flow didn't seem ...

I liked your ideas, and your title, but it could have been written in a more rythmic and poetic way. Using rhymes would work nicely, for example. On a good ...

I enjoyed your ending a lot. But that spelling error with "there" instead of their and some of the wording, most of which has been commented on before, makes the ...

Good poem and good concepts. The only thing is a couple lines weren't very clear (at least to me) near the end. One of these is, "(Not that I want ...

Great poem and nice details. The only thing I would recommend is adjusting your meter a bit so it flowsmore smoothly. Simple edits like changing "Thoughts of pain gone." to ...

This has lots of charm to it. Just two suggestions: try to shorten the list of qualities of the knight just a bit to give each more meaning. Also try ...

Pretty cool. I know it was said before, but if you use more elaborate vocabulary the poem will be a lot better. Some of the wording also took away from ...

This is a very unique type of poem. I wrote a quartet similar to this recently and it certainly reminds me of it. You did a pretty good job. It ...

This poem is very meaningful. I especially enjoyed the ending. I liked how you made him choose to take off the vest, his only protection, in order to take the ...

First off, I'ma praticular fan of phoenixes and rhyming poems, so it was no suprise that I though your poem was great. But, on top of that, you used great ...

Add some rymes to your poem. Right now it's really choppy. With rymes your work can be smoothed out. You have a good plot but you should make your message ...

You have a lot of emotion in your piece. You could have used more discriptors though. This would help you show the reader your feelings instead of just telling them. ...